sample commentary

 

       The writer purpose is to show the tenderness between mother and daughter. He uses the tone affectionate. The passage is narrative rather than descriptive. The audience could be chocolates lovers or foodies. Or for them who have loving relationship.

       In the text the writer uses past tenses as well as present tenses. Past represents about the dreadful dream as the narrator sees and present says about the happy moment, about joy that she always wants to be in present.  .dots in punctuation represents the omitted words that may give extra information which can be made sense by readers. The reiterate capital word DEATH is used for having attention among readers. Such letter is present to show the literal idea of the main information. Here in this case probably the text suggests about the dread nature that a mother sees in the dream.

      The narrator wakes up shrieking as that was a part of frightening dream. Then her daughter came with such innocence with unaware about the thing; smelling chocolates and vaneilla. A huge contrast is created between an awful dream and of peaceful untroubled sleep. ‘Chocolates’, ‘vaneilla’  ‘untroubled sleep’ are focused to have a certain sense in the textual reference. After the terrible dream narrator wants herself to be in the pleasant present, with her daughter, her family. The nightmare suggests a horror or possibly trauma shocking dream that no one wants to see.